Anyone want $1000?

[Bryan H.]

of course you do! This has been a test of my marketing. I figured I would test 2 posts and see which one gets the better response rate.

My first post was all about "what's in it for me" this one was more about you're desires.

Now that I got your attention.

I tend to DIY everything the first time and afterwards determine I never want to DIY again. This time its direct marketing to out of state absentee owners. Designing my own cards, having them printed from Ebay. Then I will merge the property address into the text and mail out about 500 of these.

Any feedback would be appreciated. Any proof reading would really be appreciated.

Thanks

[Aaron Thivierge]

No offense, but you asked for feedback:  The mailer appears "disingenuous" to me. If it came in my mailbox, it would be put with the "red plum" flyer, the credit card "pre-approval" mail, the "YOU are preselected for this gift" …all the above I use to start my wood stove fires under the kidding. 

I'd drop some of the exclamation points and get rid of the red font (at least).  Furthermore, the $1000 title to this thread is similar to the 'bait and switch' interpretation I got from the flyer.  People don't like to be tricked or conned.  Honesty, empathy, compassion, truth go along way with me and many other consumers.  

Sorry, not what you wanted to hear I'm sure.