Constructive criticism needed..... wholesale pitch 🤨

[Justin Hutchins]

So I am extremely interested in wholesaling and Love nothIng more than ridIng around on a Sunday afternoon looking for vacant properties that look like they would be a good wholesale or fix n flip. I don’t think I have a problem finding the property, doing comps and estimating repairs when it gets to that point...... BUT what is the pitch? I have a couple properties sitting on go ready to call the owners but I keep getting cold feet and don’t call. (This Is In an old town with old homes) The pitch: Hi Mr./Mrs Smith My name is Justin Hutchins and I am a real estate investor and wholesaler in Anytown Georgia, the focus of my call was to talk to you about the property that you own on 123 Abc Street. I hope I have reached you at a good time?? That’s great! So a little bit about what we do is we work hand In hand wIth home rehabIlItators In the area that specialize in finding and restoring homes. We are extremely passionate about the preservation of the older homes in the community and would like to know what your intentions are with the property? And let the constructive criticism begin..... Thanks in advance!!!