my pre foreclosure letter please critique

[Roc P.]

Hello everyone I'm a newbie to this whole marketing aspect, my main goal is to wholesale or use other creative methods to getting deals done.

My focus right now is pre foreclosure since the info is free and that I can type the letters out. I've read that handwritten or yellow letters get a better response so that is something to think about in the future.

A little history I sent letters to individuals 2 weeks away from sheriff sale, so hopefully the motivation is there. I sent a total of 16 letters, again I know its not alot but I'm focusing on doing something instead of not doing anything.

Without further ado here is the letter, I typed using info from this forum and other sources:

Dear ,
I’m truly sorry that you are facing a foreclosure. I noticed in the public records of blank County, that a foreclosure action has been filed against your property and you may not be aware of this. If this is the case I urge you to contact your lender immediately to clear this issue.
YOUR PROPERTY IS SCHEDULED FOR SHERIFF SALE ON THURSDAY, 01/15/12, SALE STARTS AT 11:00 A.M., THIS IS FOURTEEN DAYS AWAY! PLEASE CONTACT ME TODAY; I’M A LOCAL REAL ESTATE INVESTOR WHO CAN HELP YOU HELP YOU AVOID THIS FORECLOSURE.
Again contact me today as time is of the essence!

Thank you