elevator pitch cretique

[Paul Coin]

Folks I am a new investor and this is my elevator pitch.  If anyone would,  let me know how I can improve it.  Thank-you in advance.  

"We help folks that are in some kind of financial distress and need to sell their homes quickly.  Such as divorce,  probate,  or facing foreclosure,  and we purchase it quickly and for cash. 

Our company is Integrity Home Buyers.

Our goal is to help folks out of tough financial positions by purchasing their homes quickly in a win win manner.

I work with a great team of people that are constantly looking for creative ways to help folks solve their housing problems.

We also offer people who would like to invest with us the ability to earn an above average market rate that is secured by Real Estate.  

Do you know of anyone who needs to sell their home quickly for cash?  I pay a $500 fee to anyone who refers a seller to me when I purchase their home.  

Do you know of anyone sitting on money that may like to earn a great rate of return that is secured by Real Estate?"