Can I get some feed back on this prospecting letter I will send out for apartment building owners to keep me in mind when they sell,

You either understand or are working at growing your belief that long term investing is critical. 

I'll be very active in the comments responding to feedback and criticism :) all is welcome!  

Velocity of capital is critical!

Let's start with the NOI number because I feel it is the most critical.

WL is for building your net worth to deploy into deals or rentals.IUL is after you have reached critical mass and just want no headaches. (4-6M net-worth)

Not trying to be critical, just wondering what was the issue. 

Since you aren't local to do things yourself, your team is your most critical point. 

If one of them lives in it is otherwise dependent on it, their personal interests may diverge and that could lead to a family feud and possibly an eviction problem you probably want to avoid.  2) You should try to understand the inter-personal dynamic among the heirs, and remember it's critical to have empathy when dealing with the bereaved family.

. #4 does seem to be reaching a critical point.