Tenant screening is critical to your success.

If a deal can weather a storm, then maybe be sure the captain has knowledge & skill on navigating the major hazards without critical losses.

If you have any comments, feedback, or criticism of the data organization, I would greatly appreciate it!

What a critical and valuable lesson to learn! 

In-depth inspections are critical.

Once the LLC is the borrower, not you personally, it frees up your eligibility to obtain more properties using Conventional financing again.The cost of each Conventional loan is negligible compared to the cost of commercial/portfolio financing, which likely also will have a higher interest rate.There is a LOT of strategy and future planning that you should be doing, and that's why it's critical to have a great team looking out for your best interests and not just on the current transaction. 

The pm is as critical as the deal itself.

I'd love to get some advice/criticism/feedback/etc.

If I were interested in scaling the COC calculation would be critical because you generally can't scale without debt. 

Unless you are into some multi million dollar deals locally, most CA folks are investing OOS. you hit the nail on the head  saving on commissions and access to MLS is mission critical on the west coast..