@Galen Crofut awesome deck, its clear you spent a lot of time on this. I've been in your shoes before and have a few opinions you might find to be valuable.
-The occupancy rates displayed are usually off since some portion of the rentals are occupied by the owner some percentage of the year, some are only available a certain portion of the year, etc. Sounds like you should talk to @Herman Hall or someone else has local knowledge.
-Have you ever managed an Airbnb before? If so put that in your slide deck. If you've never done it before, as an investor I wouldn't give hundreds of thousands of dollars to someone who has never done this before. Try to get real data from other properties in your area along with real expenses. Go talk to other property owners or management companies and see if you can pick their brain.
-Are you planning on managing the rentals indefinitely? You don't have a number in there for management expense. If so you'll be on the hook 24/7 to deal with guest issues and you won't really be able to scale unless you want to become a property manager. Just might want to think about what you're signing up for.
-I've never actually raised money before but I've pitched to VCs and most people will not give you 20% equity for 0% cash. Maybe show that you'll put a little bit of cash in even if its a small amount it will show them you have skin in the game as well. The way you have it set up from what it looks like your investor is taking all the financial risk. You could even consider taking 30% of net revenue as a management fee with no equity but where the investor has to use you as a manager to limit your risk.
Hope this helps! Feel free to shoot me a PM if you want to chat more.
