Critique my script to sellers

[Alexxa C.]

Initially we will talk about the property/their situation then I will say the below. I don't want to waste my time with sellers who do not agree with my process. Tell me what you think.

My husband and I purchase homes all over Missouri. Some of the homes we turn into rentals, some we rehab and resale, and others we pass along to business partners. I will need about 30-60 days max to due my due diligence on the property, but it usually takes two weeks to close. This also means I’ll need access to the property. Normally we put a lock box on the door. Will that be ok?

Lets set up a time to meet so I can see the property.

[Richard C.]

Is any of that true?  Any at all?

Do you purchase homes all over Missouri?  How many have you purchased, in how many different places?

Do you turn some into rentals?  How many rentals do you own?  Do you rehab some and sell them?  How many have you flipped in this manner?  Or is, "passing along" all that you actually do?

And these people you, "pass along" properties to, they are "business partners", you say?  What is the file name of the registered business partnership with the state of Missouri?  Or are they not "business partners", but rather people you hope will be your customers in a contract assignment deal?

What sort of "due diligence" are you doing that takes 60 DAYS?  Examining every square millimeter of the place with an electron microscope?  Or is "due diligence" not something you are doing at all, and you want the 60 days to try to scare up a buyer?

How many times could you possibly need access to the property in order to conduct due diligence?  Inspections usually require access once, maybe twice if an air quality test is being done.  Are you sure that you don't need the lock-box because you are going to be parading prospective buyers through the house?

My critique of your script is it appears to be one large pile of completely dishonest BS.  If you attempted this script with me, I would make encouraging noises, get all of your detailed contact information, and have my lawyer report you to the state.