How do you make a business plan a business?

[Renee Allen]

What can I do to make my business plan more inviting? I have an idea for a business that is a money maker but I can not get anyone to invest in it or give me a loan. I am not understanding what I am doing wrong. Is there some sort of advice any of you can give me to help my business plan "pop". It needs to scream SHOW ME THE MONEY!!!! The business would operate at 100% capacity from the minute it is built. I think my major problems are 1: no money for colatoral; 2: not a very good credit score at all (but my partners arent bad!) 3: no actual experience in the field I am wanting to persue (but I do have the knowledge to hire the right people that can do the best job, my job in it would be making sure the place is running at full capacity) and 4: NO MONEY!!! I know, I know, it takes money to make money. Would someone be willing to look over everything I have and see if they can help me fix it?