Email Copy for Mobile Home Parks - Feedback?

[Joshua Smith]

Hi all - my brother @Aaron Smith and I are about start marketing to mobile home park owners. We intend on procuring phone numbers and emails, then calling them (with a VA or with slybroadcast), texting if they don't respond to calling, and putting them on an email drip. I'd like to get some feedback on our email copy. If anyone with experience has some useful feedback, we'd be very appreciative.

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Email #1 

Hi [mr./ms] [Last name]. I hope this email finds you well.

My twin brother, Aaron, and I are looking to purchase a mobile home park in the next few months. This is a shot in the dark; and we’re not even sure if you are open to selling. But in case you are, please do let us know at your convenience. We work with sellers to get the right price for their properties.

Have a great day.

Thanks,

Josh

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Email #2

Hi again [mr./ms] [Last name]. I hope this email finds you well.

Just following up on my last email here. As I mentioned, my twin brother, Aaron, and I are still interested in purchasing your mobile home park at [address]. We’re not sure if you are open to selling your property. But in case you are, we’d love to connect with you.

Have a great day.

Thanks,

Josh

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Email #3

Hi again [mr./ms] [Last name]. I hope this email finds you well.

Just following up one last time over email. As I mentioned, my twin brother, Aaron, and I are still interested in purchasing your mobile home park at [address]. We’re not sure if you are open to selling your property. But in case you are, we’d love to connect with you.

Have a great day.

Thanks,

Josh