Announcement Letter Feedbakc

[Zane O.]

We are getting ready to send out an announcement letter as part of our marketing plan, and I would love to get your feedback on the content:

"Dear family and friends,

I’m excited to let you know, in May, I took a new position as a partner in KORE Real Estate. KORE Real Estate, a partnership of Robert Keys, Carol Keys, and Zane Oliver, is engaged in the brokerage, management, investment, and development of real estate.

KORE Real Estate believes investment in real estate of significance increases the quality of life and value of the community around it, and we are passionate about bringing positive change to the culture, economy, and landscape around us.

We are here to focus on your unique needs and to help you successfully navigate your transactions. When the time comes for you, or someone you know, to buy or sell a property, KORE Real Estate would love the opportunity to guide you through the process with the care and attention you deserve. Contact us to experience the difference.

Best regards,

Zane Oliver

Partner

KORE Real Estate"

[David Hunter]

I'd get rid of the second paragraph.

Why should anyone care you're in real estate?  (be sure to answer that questions)

Also, make everyone an offer.  Tell them, if they're thinking about selling their house then they can get a free copy of your Home Seller's Guide.