I'm trying to nail down an effective system since currently my team doesn't seem to have any consistency with how these are written so I'm having trouble identifying which styles are working.I've included an example below and would love any tips or critiques! 

I think your percentages are good, and you hit the nail on the head saying that it is all property dependant.

@Ronny Tiburcio hit the nail on the head get the deals first, while you're working on deal acquisition you're talk to a CPA like the guys over at KRS, they know a lot about real estate and can answer your tax related questions.

Clean floor behind/around the toilet.Closets Shelves: Wipe down all shelf surfaces, including rods.General Make-Ready Please DO NOT fill nail holes or attempt wall and/or trim repair.

Either you are Nordstrom or Walmart, or you are a nail salon... but all the "office depot", all the "foot locker" are dying.....That is why I would not be too greedy here, if it was me...

@Terry Lao you hit the nail on the head with your source examples.

Tons of construction skills further polished!

Rosa, you are on the right path, and you hit the nail on the head when you mentioned "However, I think my problem is not having connections yet" as with any business dealing, Real Estate is dependent on relationships, and not just any relationship, they must be quality relationships with various different resource providers i.e.

@Bradley Fisher I think @Kyle Mccaw nailed it.

Now that I pound nails I suppose I should still watch it.