@Ray Jimenez - As far as the feedback you were looking for in the OP I believe you have received more than enough.
My question to you is this: Why are you not marketing this to Flippers at your REIA? If I had this deal under contract here is what I would do.
I would head to any function where I know other investors converge to talk shop and during the Need/Want or any other time where I could bend the ear of the "Seasoned" Flippers in the room I would say "Hey guys I have a great deal under contract that has an ARV of around 125K based on recent comps, I am willing to let it go for 32K if anyone is interested. However, I would be more interested in staying involved in the process as I would like to build my track record. Here is my analysis of the deal."
Purchase Price: 32,000
Rehab Budget: 24,000
Holding Costs: 30% or 37,500.00
Potential profit: 31,500
Saying that you will either make around 7K on assignment after you let them talk you down to 30K for the purchase or you will get the attention/mentoring time of someone like @Jeff Rabinowitz or any of the other successful rehabbers here who have the experience doing what you want to be doing.
Instead of looking for Private Money this early in your career after most of the veterans here have all shared on the forums and in other arenas that they weren't able to successfully find private money until they were very open with their track record and most of them will tell you that instead of presenting a singular "solicitation" for private money they first gave the potential investor their 3" Ring Binder full of here's what I've done so far any questions book.
The only caveat I can see to the above would agree with the first piece of advice you were given. Give them an offer that while not being too good to be true; makes it difficult for them to pass up. 50/50 with preferred returns or 70/30 split their way. You have to remember you aren't just looking for one and done investors, you want ladies and gentlemen that will hand you their hard earned 5-6 figures and allow you to keep their money churning better than a dairy farm.
While I only meant to leave my .02 it looks like I gave you the full nickle.
Thanks for listening!