Hey Frank,
I agree with Jimmy. Your letter is definitely too long. You don't want to come across un-professional either. Leave out "you are willing" and explaining what the homeowner will get. (they will expect you to handle everything). If it were me i would make it short and sweet. Hello, I'm Frank - lastname. I am an investor in the area. I pay cash for homes. If you are in risk of foreclosure, need to move fast, need cash for bills, want to relocate in town..... please give me a call. I will make you a fair cash offer for your home. Also if you know of someone needing to sell there home fast, please give me a call. Thank you and God Bless. Also i read another post on here where the Wholesaler drove around neighborhoods in his target marked looking for overgrowth and distressed property and mailed to them directly. You can get the owners name from the county tax records. Just a thought since your trying to save money.
Best of Luck
- Jon H.