Door knocking pitch

[Robert Lorenz]

Ok so I have my NOD list all made up are ready to go door-knocking, and went to hit it this afternoon and think I need to work on my elevator pitch. Also wouldn't mind some feedback on my flyers...

Quick pitch:

Hi, I live here in the neighborhood and try to keep an eye out for neighbors that may be in some kind of trouble I can help with.  I saw your address listed by the county assesors office as having fallen far enough behind on payments that the bank may be considering foreclosure.  I can help get you out from under your mortgage, get you caught up on payments, and even help you find another place tolive if need be.

...That's pretty much it.  The leads I hit today were all in a Habitat for Humanity neighborhood. I didn't seem to scare any of the homeowners when I mentioned them being late or near foreclosure, and one woman even told me "they won't foreclose, you know this is a Habitat for Humanity neighborhood, right?"  Not that I'm sweating it, I knew these adresses weren't on the prime end of my list... but I need to get a decent pitch and follow-upready so I'm prepared when I do.

...don't know why the pic is sideways, but here's the note I'm sticking on doors with no answer.