Introduction for Rental

Introduction for Rental

Contractor · San Diego, CA · Member since 2019 · 1 post · 0 votes

Hello, I am helping my girlfriend move out and was wondering which of these introductions would best be appealing to a landlord, all feedback is more than welcome and truly appreciated!

Thank you all in advance!

These are the following introductions

2)Hello, my name is Cordelia. I am writing to you about the RV you have for rent.

I am 20 years old and currently reside in San Diego, California. I have been living here for the past four years in the same house with roommates and looking to relocate to a more quiet and peaceful area.

I'm originally from Scandinavia and miss the lakes and the peace. I grew up living on a farm, surrounded by nature and animals.

I have two well trained bulldog mixes, no other pets.

I'm financially stable, and more than able to pay first and last month's rent as required. I am also more than willing to put a deposit to show I am serious.

I intend to stay awhile so vacancy would not be an issue on your end.

I am a sober person, I do not smoke, drink or use drugs. I am not a party person either.

I would be moving in alone, with my dogs.

I know I am young but can assure you very mature, an old soul and would not cause you any troubles.

It would be life changing if you could grant me the chance of moving into your trailer!

I look forward to hearing back

Thank you

Regards

Cordelia

3)

Hello

I am writing to you concerning the RV you have for rent.

My name is Cordelia, I am 20 years old and I currently reside in busy San Diego, California.

I have been living here for the past four years at the same rental.

I am looking to relocate to a more quiet and peaceful area. I'm originally from Scandinavia and deeply miss the lakes and the peace. I grew up on a farm surround by animals and nature.

I have two well trained bulldog mixes, no other pets.

I'm financially stable, I am more than able to pay first and last month's rent as required. I am also more than willing to put a deposit to reserve and show how serious I am if you grant me the chance to move in your trailer.

I do not smoke or drink or use drugs. Nor am I a party person.

I would be moving in alone, with my dogs.

I plan on staying a while so vacancy would not be an issue on your end. I am a mature person despite my young age and can guarantee you, I would not cause you any issues.

I deeply look forward to hearing back

Thank you!

Regards

Cordelia

4)

Hello

My name is Cordelia, I am a young mature professional woman looking to relocate to a quite and peaceful area.

I currently reside in San Diego, California. I have been living here for the past four years in the same rental.

I have two professional trained bulldog mixes, no other pets.

I'm originally from Scandinavia and deeply miss the lakes and the peace. I grew up on a farm surrounded by animals and nature.

I am financially stable, and more than able to pay first and last month's rent as required. I can also put down a deposit to show how serious I am.

I do not smoke or drink or use drugs. I do not party either.

I would be moving in alone, with my dogs.

If given the chance, I would be moving in for a while, so vacancy would not be an issue on your end.

I know I am rather young but I am very mature and can assure you, there would be no issues.

I am more than willing to answer any questions or concerns you may have and deeply look forward to hearing back from you!

Thank you!

Regards

Cordelia

Obtaining this rental would be life changing and want to improve her chances of obtaining it, thank you once again !

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  • Nathan GesnerBusiness Member
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    Real Estate Broker · Cody, WY · Member since 2010 · 28k+ posts · 41k+ votes
    5y

    As a Property Manager / Landlord with 400 rentals, I don't want either one of them. I want your government-issued picture ID, proof of income, a credit/criminal background, and references. Objective data floats my boat, not emotional appeals about what a nice guy you are.

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  • Realtor · Encinitas, CA · Member since 2020 · 125 posts · 92 votes
    5y

    I like number 4 best because it states the "why" right up front. I think there is too much elaboration, keep it short and sweet. Stress good credit score, long term rental & personal references and stable employment history. I would remove the word bulldog, that breed reference can turn some people off. It would be better to refer to the dogs as 2 professionally trained rescue dogs under _____ lbs.

    Here is a possible draft that is more direct:

    Hello

    My name is Cordelia, I am a mature, young professional woman looking to relocate to a quiet and peaceful area. I'm originally from a farm in Scandinavia and want to get back to nature. I have been living in San Diego, California for the past four years and I have excellent long term rental and personal references (provided below). I am well employed, with great credit and ample cash reserves. I am looking for a long term home for me and my 2 professionally trained rescue dogs under _____ lbs. I do not smoke, drink or use drugs and am ready to put down a deposit today. I look forward to hearing back from you!

    Thank you!

    Regards

    Cordelia

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