How's my wholesaling script?

[Andrew Webber]

Hey BP Community!

So I know that sometimes the most important step when getting started in REI is well... starting. I have a side gig or two like any person who is trying to get together extra money to start their investing career, and one of those is walking dogs. I use this as an opportunity to "Drive for Dollars", just by foot, and decided that it was time to send out a few handwritten notes. I am trying to find the right balance of short message that I can write by hand, specificity so they know its not every house that it is being sent to, and making me sound like an actual person. What do you guys think about this script:

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I have been looking at homes in {Enter City Name Here}, more specifically the {neighborhood name} area for a few months now, and I was walking through your neighborhood, saw your house at {123 main st}, and was wondering if you had any interest in selling. If you would be open to a conversation please give me a call =)

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I am actually looking for a place for myself that I could buy if it the numbers lined up well, but work with a Real Estate team if any person I spoke to decided to sell on the open market, and would love to set up some private deals as a wholesaler if any of these people actually gave me a call and didnt want to list on the open market. Does anyone have any thoughts or ideas for me either about that script or my plan in general?

Thanks! 

[Andrew Webber]

Thanks @Jamiel Strickland! Have you don’t some yourself? Good call on the “don’t mind it needing a little work” as these are all houses that I saw as being “in distress”. I went back and forth on the something about myself. Trying to keep it manageable to write over and over again.