I'm trying to nail down an effective system since currently my team doesn't seem to have any consistency with how these are written so I'm having trouble identifying which styles are working.I've included an example below and would love any tips or critiques! 

You'll save way more money by buying a place that doesnt gave environmental issues.

Some of the differences with SFR that make them less valuable than otherwise similar comps are location on a busy street, smaller lot, bad condition, structural defects, higher tax area, different school zones, different deed restrictions, access to main roads, rush hour traffic, obsolete or unpopular architectural style, inferior finishes, time since remodeling, age of roof, flooring, and others too numerous to mention.To get the discount to fit your formula, you’d probably need to find a house needing significantly more than $15k of work.

If yes, then go in @Brandon Turner style with three offers.

My previous experience includes high end residential design but I'm very flexible towards a variety of styles and budgets.

In my area in NJ a single family house rented to one family usually does not cash flow.I am thinking about buying a house from 2 retired brothers who live in single family house: one brother lives on the top floor and...

Second you need to examine your management style.

Part of this is due to the personality style of the people who own 4-plexes here.

Any decent environmental consulting or engineering firm can knock one out pretty quick and inexpensively in most cases.

Currently I supplement a portion of a family members retirement monthly thru a dividend style payment plan.